The Reckoning

Photo copyrighted: Sandra Crook.

Photo copyrighted: Sandra Crook.

Rides Tall rested on Dawn Rider, around him the forest was totally silent. It is the Christian year 1020, which meant nothing to them. But what was important was the faint presence which had arrived in silence. It was if the merest whiff of wood smoke had touched them. Then Rides Tall saw the hazy shadow. Somehow he knew that it belonged to a elk who’s life he had taken as a young buck. Gently Rides Tall dismounted then sent Dawn Rider away. Whilst the spirit stood silently watching him. This former king of the forest required payment from the Mohawk.

Footnotes:

I have just returned from a visit to New York State. The above story was penned whilst sitting on a veranda studying a dense area of forest. Thank you New York State. My thanks are also due to Sandra, for her photo of a oak tree enabled me to post the above story.

Although I still create stories for various sites, I have held back posting a some of them as I was not satisfied with what I managed to produce. I guess that sometimes we all find it hard sometimes to come up with something fresh.

Driving

An old warrior at Bolton Abbey

This Post Has 46 Comments

  1. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    You’ve put us in a moment. So Rides Tall is facing the spirit of the elk? Nice medieval feel to this.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Rochelle, the forested area of New York State inspired me.

  2. J Hardy Carroll

    I was in upstate New York last month and was deeply moved by the history there. Nicely done

    1. Michael Humphris

      Me to, Woodstock to Manchester in Vermont, it all offered inspiration

  3. granonine

    I love this. Many layers, and one wonders at the coming confrontation between the animal spirit and Rides Tall. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Granonine, the forested areas of New York State and Vermont offered much inspiration

      1. granonine

        And beauty. So much beauty.

        1. Michael Humphris

          I enjoy seeing new places. I do hope that I will be able to write more about New York State.

  4. Iain Kelly

    Beautiful atmosphere.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Iain, I was given a lot of inspiration by the east coast forest of New York State

  5. James

    I like the texture and fabric of naturalistic magic and spirits. It brings one closer to the environment if not to God.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you James, you have encouraged me to consider writing more around this area, which is similar to the genre of my two unpublished novel length stories. I do find that trees bring me closer to God

  6. Keith's Ramblings

    An intriguing tale indeed.

    Click to read my FriFic!

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is kind of you Keith.

  7. neilmacdon

    Payment will not be death, I’m sure

    1. Michael Humphris

      I agree, for Rides Tall does pay due respect when out hunting

      1. neilmacdon

        I was sure he did

  8. Moon

    Great atmosphere, Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Moon, I was so pleased to read your comment.

  9. ceayr

    This reader was transported to the time when the noble savage understood his world.
    Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am so pleased to hear that, thank you.

  10. Varad

    A great selection for your MC’s name: Rides Tall. The nobility of the character comes bursting through without you having to write about it. Very vivid imagination in your piece, Michael. I quite enjoyed reading it.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Varad for such kind feedback.

  11. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Love the atmosphere in this… there is a sense of old Mythology which works well with that tree.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Bjorn, the forest in New York State deserves the praise, it inspired me.

  12. pennygadd51

    You drew me into the world of Rides Tall, and left me wanting more!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Penny – I want to know more also, I am hoping that my pen will oblige

  13. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    I can see (and read) your inspiration!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dawn

  14. Sandra

    Very atmospheric piece, Michael. I liked it.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sandra, your photo was very timely for me.

  15. draliman

    Nice piece, an almost dreamy scene in the depths of the forest.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Draliman, I hoped that the Mohawk Indians had a spiritual connection with their surroundings. Almost like a dream world, so your comment was gratefully recieved.

  16. Kelvin M. Knight's blog

    There is a comforting spiritual slant to this tale, Michael. I loved the Rides Tall and Dawn Rider names, which conjure a nomadic lifestyle in my mind’s eye.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Kelvin, I was grateful for your feedback, as I penned this piece believing that the Mohawk Indians had some degree of spiritual connect with their surroundings.

  17. rgayer55

    I like where you went with this, Michael. Loved the names and the spiritual aspect. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Russell – I was inspired by the forested area’s close to my son’s house

  18. Lynn Love

    Debts owed must be paid – no matter what the personal cost. Lovely feel and imagery Michael. Hope you enjoyed your American visit

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Lynn My visit was great and has given me much material to write about

      1. Lynn Love

        Ah, inspiration abounds – wonderful 🙂

  19. Liz Young

    Trees exude such power that I’m not surprised you could write there.

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is so true Liz

  20. yarnspinnerr

    This is a winner.

    1. Michael Humphris

      So find of you to say so, thank you Yarnspinnerr

  21. Miles Rost

    The Mohawks! Does this mean that he may be an Oneida? Or a different band? Well done!

    1. Michael Humphris

      He could indeed be from the Oneida. Thank you Miles.

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