Dreaming

Photo copyright Jan Wayne Fields

Photo copyright Jan Wayne Fields

Richard saw the power boat heading into New York bay. Where it had come from or where it was going he could only imagine. He knew what would be happening if he was her captain. They would be heading east towards the lower bay for a days fishing, just like he used to do with his dad. As he squashed another flea, he wondered had he not turned to drink, then walked out on Pamula and the kids, might he have been going fishing today. As he stepped off the quay and felt the water close over him, he wondered …

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  1. ceayr

    Neat tale, cleverly unfolded.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I very much appreciate your comment. Thank you. Mike

  2. Sandra

    A moment of desperation nicely observed.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sandra,

  3. neilmacdon

    I liked the way you conveyed his desperation with calm words

    1. Michael Humphris

      He was calm and sad, and very good at swimming when young. I hope that he finds strength to fight for his life and wins.

  4. creatingahome

    Oh noooo, I was hoping for a positive turn.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I hope that he will fight for life and win, as the water closes over him.

  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Sometimes dreams cease, and you hit that dead end… I think it’s never too late to make a turn

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is so true and important to remember. Thank you.

  6. wmqcolby

    Despairing… but maybe that cold water might wake him up to reality and he’ll swim up and try life again.

    Might check spelling on the first sentence, the word “imagine” instead of “imagining.” Should be stepped “off” the quay instead of “of” the quay. Take care of that, you’re home free.

    Great story, Mike.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am not sure where this story came from, I set out writing a very different piece. I also hope the shock of the water makes him fight for his life. Thank you for the corrections, it is appreciated. Mike

  7. spicedmullings

    Wonder if he is escaping the consequences of his actions!
    It takes guts to face them and rectify. Never too late to change!

    1. Michael Humphris

      That’s true, thank you for taking the time to comment. Mike

  8. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    You captured that last moment of desperation well. I’m like Kent, I hope the cold water wakes him up to better options and a swim to safety.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Rochelle, he was in a bad place, but the cold water will trigger a desire to live and he is a strong swimmer. Mike

  9. mickwynn2013

    Powerfully written. It seems nothing will deter him, he’s thinking of other things as though his suicide is routine.

    1. Michael Humphris

      He was in a bad place, but he wants to recover, and will swim. Thank you for your supportive comments. Mike

  10. gahlearner

    I hope he swims. When you’re at the bottom, the only way is up. Great story.

    1. Michael Humphris

      He is a good swimmer, and he wants to recover, the cold water will trigger in him, a strong desire to live. Thank you for your comment. Mike

  11. rgayer55

    Life is full of “what-ifs,” but every day is a gift. That’s why they call it the present. Perhaps he’ll unwrap it and see that there is a beautiful new future inside.

    1. Michael Humphris

      That’s a great way of looking at things. I hope he has the ability to unwrap and start again. Thank you. Mike

  12. aliciajamtaas

    A delightfully different take on the prompt. Maybe memories of his dad will bring him back. Well told.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you. It always amazes me how different everyone of us tells the story from the same prompt. Mike

  13. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    So sad…

    1. Michael Humphris

      He had lost his respect for himself, however he is strong swimmer. Thank you for commenting.

  14. patriciaruthsusan

    Good story, Mike. I also hope the cold water brings him to his senses and he fights for life. It sounds as though he has time to turn things around. Good writing. —- Suzanne

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