It Happen’s
We went for a drive – then we got lost – that’s how it started. None of us knew what was about to happen. Billy had been driving whilst the rest of us drank home made gin. I did not noticed Jill slipping Billy the odd drink or two, until it was to late.
I know we spun of the road, and I felt the car falling. I know I will not walk again, but I was the lucky one. Billy and Jill were burnt alive when the car bust into flames. Whilst Joe and myself were thrown out of the car. I think Joe probably died instantly when his neck was broken. The one I really feel sorry for is my unborn child: Joe’s child. I only had a month to go, one month and our son would have been born. I’ve lost my friends and the future that I was looking forward to. Now I am dying, whether anyone will ever find us at the bottom of this cliff, only god knows. Our father …
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Powerful despair in this one. I can feel her hopelessness. Very well written.
Thank you Iain, despair was the emotion that I was hoping came across.
A horribly tragic tale, Michael. I think she’s wrong – I think she has a punishment just as bad as the others, to lie there knowing she’s dying, waiting for her own end. Well done
I felt that as I wrote this story. Thank you for the insight as to how this story came over.
I am the lucky one. I think it should be changed to unlucky. Terrific tale of tragedy and deep despair.
Neel, I am grateful to know how this story came over, thank you.
I am not sure she would want to be found and forever feel that loss. Very well written indeed.
Thank you Angie, I agree that to live with this level of loss would hurt very much.
So very sad! It sure highlights the dangers of drinking and driving. Great story, Mike!
Thank you PJ,
My pleasure!
Well, that was amazingly tragic.
Thank you James, That is kind of you.
The nightmare scenario, when you can’t bear to be still alive, but know that even if you did want to live, there’s nobody to help. Sends shivers down the spine.
It certainly would, thank you for your feed back. It was appreciated.
Tragic Story.
Thank you for commenting, it was appreciated.
What a chilling scene. A dreadful situation skillfully described.
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Thank you for your kind comments, they were appreciated
You can feel the despair. Great story!
Thank you Rosemary
this was hard to read, for I felt the intensity from the start and she is alone, bearing the burden to be the last one living and seeing everyone else gone, that’s the greatest heartbreak, even her own dying seemed less important. so sad Michael.
Thank you for your insightful comments. This story grew like ripples on a pond, I wanted to put in a happier end, but it was not to be in this case.
A compelling read, really makes you think how dangerous drinking and driving is. It’s so sad about the almost due child and the beginning of the Lord’s Prayer at the end really gives a feeling of desperateness and the coming of death. Maybe he’d prefer to die knowing what happened to his friends and family?
I am so grateful for your feedback on this story, thank you