Watching from afar

Prompt curtsy of Penny Gadd

Prompt curtsy of Penny Gadd

So much variety you are amazing creatures but so deadly. Yes I watch from afar, for you are my stock in trade. My teacher said just sit and study them, there is such variety. They may drive you mad, but do not let on, and you might learn, for they offer abundant material for the budding writer.

Me …? Well I am many legged and have the most beautiful patterned coat, yes I am deadly when hunger calls. But then that is true for all. But for now I watch, but if I bite you, you may dance the Tarantella.

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This Post Has 45 Comments

  1. Sandra

    Being observed by a spider is an unnerving thought. Nicely done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      So pleased to hear from you, thank you Sandra

  2. Iain Kelly

    I can cope with spiders, but not if I was to learn they were actually malevolent!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Iain they are rarely malevolent…just frightened or hungry.

  3. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    I’m not a big fan of spiders to begin with. This is just plain creepy. And you may take that as a compliment. πŸ˜‰



    1. Michael Humphris

      Compliment very gratefully received, thank you Rochelle

  4. Susan A Eames

    Oh, I liked this chilling take on the photo prompt, Michael.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

    1. Michael Humphris

      Susan I am so pleased that you liked this. The tarantula said not to chilly please. πŸ™‚

  5. patrickprinsloo

    Well done; the boots on the other leg this time.

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is so true Patrick, the watchers are the watched

  6. granonine

    Any spider I catch watching me is going to die. And even if they’re not watching me—yup. Take no chances, take no prisoners πŸ™‚

    1. Michael Humphris

      Poor spiders, they always ran away if given the chance, my granddaughter says that’s not true πŸ™‚

  7. Dale

    This story is creepy and the idea is good.
    You really should use Grammarly, Michael – it will help you with your punctuation, which will help your readers enjoy your stories even more – because they are good. You have said you have trouble with it. I use Grammarly myself! Just a thought, for you to take or leave.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sorry Dale, I struggle to turn the computer on some days. I did look at Grammarly, it frightens the pants off me πŸ™‚

      1. Dale

        You just install it and it does all the work for you!!

        1. Michael Humphris

          Sounds good, Dale

  8. Sascha Darlington

    I like this! I think spiders are kind of cool…as long as they are not actually on me. πŸ™‚

    1. Michael Humphris

      I agree Sascha.

  9. msjadeli

    Its bite is nothing personal, which makes it that much more chilling. Good story, Michael

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is a good point, I do appreciate the feedback, thank you.

      1. msjadeli

        You are welcome, Michael.

  10. neilmacdon

    Some spaces just aren’t built for sharing

    1. Michael Humphris

      It feels like space is at a premium these days. Perhaps when we head to the stars ?

  11. ceayr

    Cool story, neat POV.
    But I can’t believe how many commenters want to kill our fellow creatures!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much for the compliment sir. I say run spider run when my wife sees one.

  12. Tannille

    Don’t mess with the spider. Great use of P-O-V!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Poor old spiders, they have a job to do. Thank you for the compliment

  13. Brenda's Thoughts

    I think it’s the many legged part that creeps me about spiders. But, they have a part to play. Hope there’re none nearby who are hungry. Very creative story and POV!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I like to think that their many legs are to help them run away,

  14. draliman

    Oh boy, how many of them are watching me now with hunger on their minds… πŸ™‚

    1. Michael Humphris

      Very few I hope,

  15. JoHawkTheWriter

    Time to shoo the unwanted guest out the door. Bye, bye spider.

    1. Michael Humphris

      But spiders prefer to be indoors.

  16. lisarey1990

    So creepy!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Being on eight legs means we have to creep, it’s all about control…

  17. Abhijit Ray

    Deadly plant this is. It appears not to hesitate to eat human flesh when hungry. Don’t make it angry or keep it hungry.

    1. Michael Humphris

      All plants can blossom if given the right environment, spiders are just the same.

  18. Bernadette Braganza

    A bit chilling.
    I personally prefer keeping away from spiders.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sorry to chill the air, but perhaps spiders have eight legs to run away.

  19. 4963andypop

    Nice riddle. Im guessing a black widow, though the first paragraph led me to believe your narrator was a human student of Arachnids, and the last line suggested tarantula.

    Learning that he, himself, was a member of that class made me think how believable this was, for what else would a spider do with his time, but think and observe and philosophize?

    1. 4963andypop

      Or should I say “her?”

    2. Michael Humphris

      You are right to be confused about the narrator, I was myself… Watching from cafe windows, studying humanity, I feel very small, rather like a philosophising spider,

      1. 4963andypop

        It was a very pleasant confusion.

  20. patriciaruthsusan

    A creepy story with good writing, Michael. I hope there are no extra mean spiders out there. My dad wouldn’t let us kill spiders as they kill other insects. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

    1. Michael Humphris

      I feel the same about spiders as your dad, nurture nature is my mantra.

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