The phantom dinner

Prompt from: Dale  Rogerson

Prompt from: Dale Rogerson

I see she’s a regular dinner here Bert. Do you both still sing Chim Chim Cher-ee. No my Mary’s right grown up now, but she still pops in for special occasions. She was here yesterday, dinned with Emily. Gave her a few tips. You know how to get the best out of an umbrella in London. I even heard her telling Emily to watch out for Chimney Sweeps. I did laugh. Bert have you still got that old car, you know Chitty, the one Coggins sold you. I have. Well let’s go and join Mary, or should I say Julie.

Footnote: I have added a footnote, following questions as to why I had not used paragraphs etc. This my original post for this prompt, was written as a continuous flow of words; perhaps Bert was dreaming… the altered version now appears in the position of my first post ! I am not quite sure how that has occurred. !

A fine day at Mevagissey

A fine day at Mevagissey

This Post Has 8 Comments

  1. Russell Gayer

    Nice take on Mary Poppins. If you would break it into paragraphs when changing characters it would be easier to read.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sorry about the difficult read, in this version I saw Bert as dreaming. I have since posted a second version which is divided into paragraphs

  2. Brenda's Thoughts

    I like the “continuous flow of words” version! =)

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am so glad to hear that, although I know it was much harder to read, it was that I originally saw Bert as dreaming…

  3. granonine

    It took me a moment to realize I’d read this earlier–Once I figured out what was going on, it was perfectly clear 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, sorry about the need to publish two versions, but it did help me, sort out the story.

  4. jillyfunnell

    Like Brenda, I enjoyed the continuous flow.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you jilly, it is really useful to understand how different styles of writing are seen.

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