Four lane ends

Photo prompt from C E Ary

Photo prompt from C E Ayr

High on the moors four lanes come together. Nearby a neglected farm seems to be sinking back into the moor. A Manor House has its doors locked and barred and stone flags missing from the roof. A small church seemed to have fared little better, its linch gate hangs from one hinge.

Almost bent double and battling to make headway against the niddering wind appeared a individual dressed in threadbare clothes. Appearing intoxicated after taking a few steps forward the man collapsed in an untidy heap. Patrick was home with his blood stained face and blooded knuckles.

A fine day at Mevagissey

A fine day at Mevagissey

This Post Has 38 Comments

  1. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    I liked the “niddering wind.” I think it describes the wind here as I write.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Rochelle, if the wind is niddering, there is little better than pen and paper and a warming drink.

  2. neilmacdon

    Wonderful images and vocabulary, Michael

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Neil, I have just spent time with my grandson [15] discussing reading and vocabulary.

  3. Iain Kelly

    An evocative take that begs the question – where was he coming home from? Good stuff.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Iain.

  4. ceayr

    Just another Friday night in Megavissey, Michael?

    1. Michael Humphris

      I feel the Lake District calling today; perhaps it is time for a little Wordsworth and Ruskin. The landscape of Devon and Cornwall will have to wait. But then Scotland is also calling to me… perhaps it is time for a gipsy caravan, but it will have to have a wood burning stove and a supply of Whiskey

  5. Keith's Ramblings

    An intriguing tale of a character that’s I’m guessing is very much down on his luck.

    Here’s my tale!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Keith, he has won a boxing match, unfortunately he spent all his winnings at a hostelry.

  6. bearmkwa

    Ohhh, I felt that one down deep. Great writing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      What a great comment, thank you so much.

  7. Susan A Eames

    Richly vivid and intriguing story – I had to look up ‘niddering’!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Susan. Niddering for me means a evil and cold wind that finds its way into every gap.

  8. pennygadd51

    Great descriptions conjuring up the harshness of life on the high moor, and they tell us such a lot about Patrick. Like everybody else, I loved ‘niddering wind’. I was also impressed by the conciseness with which you told us he’d been drinking and fighting.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so very much Penny, I really do appreciate your feedback… Giving good written feedback is something I have never been good at, which saddens me.

  9. Liz Young

    It sounds like he’s had a really bad day.

    1. Michael Humphris

      His day started of ok, till the whiskey arrived. His home hamlet of Tawthorpe is suffering much worse.

  10. granonine

    I had to look up “niddering,” and seems to mean “cowardly, weak.” So was it just a pesky little wind? Anyway, I love the word and in my own mind I translated it to “bothersome,” And what a bleak picture of poor Patrick, not much of a future. Lots of pathos in this story, Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Linda, for me niddering mean evil and cold, a wind which finds every gap in clothing etc. Patrick has arrived back at his birth place to find the hamlet in a worse condition than himself !

      1. granonine

        I suspected the word had a different meaning from what I found online. Many of the comments made it clear that they think of it they same way you do, and it makes lots more sense for your story.

        You did an excellent job of describing both the hamlet and poor Patrick. Visual writing.

        1. Michael Humphris

          I suspect before the time of radio and mass produced books, such terms varied widely. I can recall it being so even from one village to another.

  11. Dale

    Excellent descriptions, Michael. Loved the “niddersome”.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dale, I condensed and altered a story that I started a couple of years back. For me niddering means a cold and evil wind that finds every gap in clothing.

  12. Abhijit Ray

    Nice description of a desolate location. It is good drunk Patrick returned home all drunk and bloodied.

    1. Michael Humphris

      He will have a shock when he recovers as his home hamlet is in a worse condition than him. I hope that he will recover and work to improve things

  13. draliman

    Great imagery, sounds very desolate.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Desolate is a great choice of word… however when the sun shines the area surrounding this hamlet can be beautiful. When I wrote this piece I had a moment in time just at the end of 1918, when the hamlet had lost most of its men. Hopefully Patrick will sober up and put things to right

  14. plaridel

    it sounds like the beginning of a novel. haunting and evocative. well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Plaridel

  15. msjadeli

    They don’t call it the demon alcohol for nothing. Sorrowful situation that may be reaching a conclusion soon.

    1. Michael Humphris

      In my mind Patrick will rise to the challenge and things will improve. But sadly I have known others for whom alcohol is a disaster

  16. siobhan1967

    I think I’ve been to the place where the four lanes meet – lovely writing. I also liked the niddering wind – very Cornish.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Over the years I occasionally come across such places, including in Cornwall. It usually takes a strong individual to turn things around.

  17. theministryofshrawleywalks

    Its been said before but that Niddering wind!! Love it!!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am happy that you said it again, it is appreciated

  18. Nobbinmaug

    Intriguing. It looks like Patrick has some soul searching to do.

    1. Michael Humphris

      He certainly has,

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