Baron Blackthorn

Photo copyright: Goroyboy

Photo copyright: Goroyboy

The baron incarcerated in the dungeon of his own home, had lost count of how long he had been held captive, but his hair had grown long and grey. When after weeks of labour, the ancient mortar gave way; he crawled into an abandoned passage that once allowed access to an ice house. Upon reaching the derelict ice store, it was but a moments work for him to break down the rotten door and escape. Now he had a choice, revenge or flight. He chose revenge. His hands dripping blood he tore apart a tangle of briers. Finding his clans store of weapons he selected a spiked mace and his fathers battle axe. Now his jailers would understand why you never crossed a Scottish baron. There would be many English women who would be making wreaths. The baron sold his life dearly, as he bludgeoned his way through his family’s home. Bute force saw him reach his former bedroom and dispatch the English lord who had raped Blackthorns wife and thought to rule Blackthorns lands.

175 words

Footnote. I am still unable to use the WordPress ‘like’ button, but I will read all the stories posted here this week. And will attempt to comment where able. Mike

Mike attempting to  write.

Mike attempting to write.

This Post Has 20 Comments

  1. yarnspinnerr

    That is a lot of story in 175 words. Waiting for the next episode.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sadly the rest of the Baron Blackthorns story is lost in the mist of time.

      1. yarnspinnerr


  2. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

    That was a great story Michael. You had me believing it was true the way you told it.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Irene, perhaps I have read to many Scottish tales written by Sir Walter Scott.

      1. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist


        1. Michael Humphris

          Thank you Irene

  3. Priceless Joy

    It is great that baron was able to escape and exact his revenge! Great story Mike! You put a lot in a few words and made it make sense! Great job!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Residing in the hills of North Yorkshire, I am aware of the battles fought between England and Scotland. Even today I was walking on flags upon which nonconformist parishioners sat a Vicar [the wrong way round] upon a donkey and sent him packing. I was in the village church of Haworth.

      1. Priceless Joy

        Sounds very interesting!!

        1. Michael Humphris

          If anything caught my attention at school it was history.

          1. Priceless Joy

            LOL! I understand.

  4. shivamt25

    I am glad he chose revenge. Real awesome story!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I really appreciated your feedback, and am pleased that you felt this story worked well. Thank you.

  5. anuragbakhshi

    Intense revenge drama, narrated at a breakneck pace. Bravo!

    1. Michael Humphris

      What lovely feedback, thank you so very much.

  6. Raymond Roy

    Nice acceleration as you moved through the story Micheal.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Raymond, receiving feedback really helps a writer like me understand the craft of storytelling.

  7. athling2001

    Ah, the strong Scottish man! Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      The lowland Scots could be fearless when unjustly treated.

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