The Old Pier

Old Peir

Photo Copyright Erin Leary

In times of yore, many used my gift. Now should you try to reach the settlement on far shore, You will drown. A barricade has been created. Should you try to wade, you cannot evade the trap set. For they took my skin and left me with bare bones. They do not want you on far shore. Stay here in the jungle, for no longer can you join the club. So build you future here on my shore, for they say that there is no space in their world.

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  1. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    It doesn’t sound like a very friendly place.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Rochelle
      I wrote this piece sitting in a freezing showroom [heating broken] I am full of cold and waiting for my car which is being repaired. Either the grey sky in the photo or the cold here got to me. Cheers

      1. rochellewisoff

        I feel your pain, Micahel. I’ve been in that position more times than I care to count. There was the one time two years ago I sat in my cold car in the midst of winter waiting for a two truck. The driver had gotten the wrong directions and it took him an hour to find me. If that wasn’t bad enough, his heater was out.

  2. Sandra

    I guess this refers to the current migration crisis. A powerful piece with an impressive voice. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sandra, how the world reacts to migration developed as I wrote.

  3. Claire Fuller

    ‘For they took my skin…’ is such a wonderful creepy line. In fact the whole thing is menacing. I like it.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I was surprised myself, the danger is on one side of the water only.

  4. Snow's Fissures and Fractures

    I would gladly build my life on those shores, to me it is the voice of Mother Nature speaking in your story. I loved it very much.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I was surprised by what this photo prompt brought out.

  5. patrickprinsloo

    Do I need a visa to go there?

    1. Michael Humphris

      To late for visa’s, access is totally denied.

  6. creatingahome

    ‘They’ don’t like foreigners/strangers.
    You ain’t from here you don’t belong.
    Well described.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It’s as old as human history, and very topical. Being new to using photo prompts I find myself constantly surprised by what the prompt fetches out.

      1. creatingahome

        I think it still surprises everyone.
        XD

  7. aliciajamtaas

    For they took my skin and left me with bare bones. Wow! I love this line. Your entire piece is bare-bones chillilng.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Wow! Thank you.

  8. Margaret

    Well told. Very powerful language. I share your despair at the way barricades are going up all over the world. It seems that ‘border protection’ is now the number one virtue for governments. Too bad about the freezing, dying souls beyond the borders.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I was surprised that I wrote this piece. It was a call for change.

  9. draliman

    Very topical, the closing of the borders.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, It is topical, but I am still surprised that I wrote this piece. It shows the value of a good photo prompt.

  10. Bloggeuse

    Lovely imagery in this – really enjoyed your take on this week’s prompt.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I nearly did not publish it, I thought of writing something different, something sugary, I am so pleased I stayed with my first take on the picture.

  11. gahlearner

    I’d rather stay in the jungle than go ‘there’. I see this as a lament about barricades, too, but mostly the ones inside of us. Very powerful story.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Unfortunately this jungle is not a very nice place. Internal barricades are so potent. Thank you.

  12. athling2001

    Nice voice. Thanks for the story.

  13. Yolanda Renee

    Lovely, very rhythmic!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, Yolanda.

  14. Dale

    I have read and re-read this… powerful in so few words.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for your comment, it is encouraging, Thank you.

  15. Alice Audrey

    They don’t sound like the kind of people I would want to hang out with anyway.

    1. Michael Humphris

      To true, Thank you.

  16. Inside the Mind of Isadora

    A great deal said in this short 100 word story.
    Powerful …
    Isadora

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you.

  17. kathyd65

    I could shut my eyes and imagine this place, and the photo would confirm your words. I like the voice of the pilings. I like your story.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Kathy, For me this particular photo offers so many differing stories, it is great when that happens.

  18. Dawn Quyle Landau

    Very moving and poignant. The voice is haunting. I too am going with immigration, a sad and ugly new look at this…

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Dawn, Thank you, it was an inspirational photograph for me.

  19. joseph elon lillie

    Creepy. I see this water zombie thing in my mind’s eye just waiting to devour anyone fool enough to step into the water

    1. Michael Humphris

      To true, but who are the water zombies?

      1. joseph elon lillie

        Zombies who live in water. Undead pirates and sailors and such.

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