Storm to the Rescue

Copyright Sandra Crook. Thank you Sandra for a photo that allowed me to revisit one of my old stories.

Copyright Sandra Crook. Thank you Sandra for a photo that allowed me to revisit one of my old stories.

Storm could feel the psychic pull: but Issy had been sent to Diamond. In Issy’s case the force had allowed no leeway. Yet Storm understood that those who paid the Force had a choice as to which destination they when to.
Storm turned her back on the surface canal system and Force’s head office. Now she had a mission: rescue Issy. As she made her way to Alps, Storm went over what she knew about Diamond. Importantly the canal system there mirrored the system on the surface. Now all Storm needed to do was locate the entry piont to Diamond…

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Mike prior to his visit to the barbers.

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  1. neilmacdon

    This reads like the beginning of a sequence

    1. Michael Humphris

      You are right Neil. Quite a few years back I did write several thousand words about Diamond World

  2. James

    Seems to be the start of a much larger story.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Or perhaps the swan song, of a story that I attempted to write several years back.

  3. Alice Audrey

    Am I missing something?

    1. Michael Humphris

      Alice, there is no hidden message. Several years ago I unsuccessfully attempted to write a novella called Diamond. Today I attempted to rekindle my interest in the story.

  4. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    have to admit this is a little hard to follow…too many names packed into 100 words. I get it that Storm has a dangerous job ahead of her. Might be the right time to take that novella out and rework it. Time can put distance between us and old writing. When we come back to it we see new things. Yes? Bravely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Rochelle, I pruned and pruned and distorted what I had. But in so doing I rediscovered the dystopian world of Diamond. I do agree that there to many capitalised names.

  5. Michael Humphris

    Thank you Rochelle, I pruned and pruned, and distorted what I wanted to say. But having said that I have rediscovered the dystopian world of Diamond. Yes there are to many capitalised names.

  6. Dale

    Definitely feels like part of something bigger.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It seems that this story does risk turning into something bigger, like a full length novel. Ouch…

  7. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

    You’ve left us wondering and wanting. Get to work on that novella.

    1. Michael Humphris

      O dear, what have I got myself into, It seems that I have the bones of a full length novel floating in my head. Ouch

      1. Varad

        The signs are pointing you towards completing the story, Michael.

        1. Michael Humphris

          To true, for this story will not leave me alone, it nibble and nibbles away at me.

      2. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

        I know that feeling. Good luck with it.

        1. Michael Humphris

          It sounds like we both need a little bit of luck, to complete our writing.

          1. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

            Indeed.

  8. anuragbakhshi

    That left me thoroughly confused Michael . You need to let that Diamond story come out on paper, the way it wants to 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      O dear, it seem I have that bones of a full length novel about Diamond floating around in my head. Ouch

  9. Keith's Ramblings

    A challenging read yet an intriguing one! Interesting.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I do agree with challenging Keith. It feels like I have the gist of a full length novel floating around in my head. Ouch…

  10. pennygadd51

    You’ve given us a strong female character in Storm – Yayy! That immediately predisposes me to want to read this novella about the world of Diamond.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Storm and Issy will have to be strong individuals if they are to take on the Force who administer Diamond. I have the outline of a full length novel about them floating around my head. Ouch…

  11. ceayr

    More questions than answers here, Michael.
    Time to start writing!

    1. Michael Humphris

      O dear, what have I got myself into? I have the gist of a full length book about Diamond floating around my head. Ouch…

  12. Sandra

    I agree, too many names/capital letters. But I think you have the germ of something here. Have you got the time?

    1. Michael Humphris

      The time but perhaps not the energy. Time will tell.

  13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    This sounds like a seed to something much larger.

    1. Michael Humphris

      A seed is right, even a sapling, for I have several pages of suitable material waiting in the wings. So now all I need is the drive to write.

  14. granonine

    Oh, you HAVE to finish this!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I really wish that I could, for this story is like a brain worm, nibbling away at me.

      1. granonine

        Well, my goodness. Feed it!

        1. Michael Humphris

          I am not sure that feeding is required; for Storm seems to have energy to spare. But have I the energy?

  15. yarnspinnerr

    Intriguing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I like intriguing. Thank you.

  16. Sarah Ann

    This has a James Bond feel to it. The tension and suspense, the start of an adventure, come across clearly.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am so pleased to be thought of in the same sentence as Ian Fleming

  17. athling2001

    Interesting story. I would have benefitted from some backstory, but in 100 words that is not possible. Hopefully, you will write some more with these characters.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you athling, you are right about the back story. I hope to post some of it today on ‘Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers’.

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