Remembering that Day

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Have ever seen cattle released in the spring after spending the winter cooped up in a barn. If you have you will know how we felt the day. Some ran jumping with joy, whilst others cried as they danced. A few refused to believe they stood staring in fright.

The fans were turned off. The walls that our ancestors built were dismantled. Then we found those great doors that had been sealed for millennia: we hammered and dragged them open. We were released from the vast networks of storage caverns which had saved humanity when Adrasteia came. Liberty.

Michael Humphris.

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  1. neilmacdon

    Gorgeous. I saw them streaming out, silhouetted at the gates by the sunshine

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you – It is a lovely sight to see animals released into natures arms. I image we would feel the same.

  2. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    The feeling of liberty after confinement is tangible. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Rochelle, I am so pleased by your comment, thank you.

  3. Snow's Fissures and Fractures

    Nicely done, Michael. Free at last.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Freedom to roam at will, is getting a rare commodity these days. O dear I think that I have just given myself another story to write. But thank you for your feed back, it is appreciated.

  4. jellico84

    Oh, wow, what a wonderful capture of liberation! Reminds me of the final scene of “Logan’s Run” when all the people begin coming back out onto the surface. Sooo cool! 🙂 <3

    1. Michael Humphris

      I was so pleased by your comments. I need to watch Logan’s Run.

      1. jellico84

        Funny, I was thinking the same thing. Been a while since I pulled out that DVD. Maybe this weekend I’ll have time.

        1. Michael Humphris

          Having time, that is a problem. I feel like I could write for a hundred years. It is strange, I could not write a letter let alone a story, for the first fifty years of my life!

  5. Dale

    And…. breathe in that freedom!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Dale,

  6. James

    Interesting that you saw gates. Humanity freed after some dystopian catastrophe drove then underground. It does look like a bright and cheery day.

    1. Michael Humphris

      This piece of flash fiction, is a spin off from a longer story. Which was inspired by storage vaults for natures bounty.

  7. Siobhan McNamara

    Very atmospheric – let’s hope humanity uses its second chance well!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I also hope that they will, thank you for the feedback, it really helps my understanding of how a story comes over. Thank you

  8. Iain Kelly

    Excellent feeling of emerging from the darkness – or as we call it in Scotland, the start of Spring! Well done Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Iain

  9. ceayr

    Well told, apocalypse over.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you. It seems that this apocalyptic event comes round every few millennia

  10. Rommy

    Thanks for providing a bit of sunshine. We’re still digging out from under a snowstorm where I live.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sounds just like how things use to be here, sixty years ago. Glad you enjoyed the story, hope that warmer weather is soon with you.

  11. Sandra

    This was expertly told. I sensed the fever of liberation.

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is so kind of you to say, thank you.

  12. Magaly Guerrero

    The excitement is vibrant… clearly felt in the jumping and dancing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am so pleased that the excitement came across. Thank you for your feedback it is appreciated

  13. justjoyfulness

    I can imagine how liberating and exhilarating that would be. Very well-described!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Yet frightening also, like us being teleported to another unknown world. Thank you for your feedback, it was appreciated

  14. Sarah Potter Writes

    I’m guessing that some of the occupants of that cavern were born there and had never seen the outside. Your story makes me want to know more.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am pleased – Remembering that Day – is a just a small slice from a much longer story that I am slowly working on.

      1. Sarah Potter Writes

        It sounds interesting and full of potential. By longer story, do you mean long short-story, novella, novel, or whatever it happens to end up as when you reach the end?

        1. Michael Humphris

          So far there is a beginning and the start of an ending. I see a novella I think.

  15. neelwritesblog

    I could feel liberation, all capitalised.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much, Neel

  16. Michael Wynn

    You’ve created a great sense of freedom and exhilaration pent up and released at last. And with the help of cows which I adore and have seen when put out to pasture, even after milking they get quite frisky to be back in the field.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It is lovely to watch cows as they are released after over wintering inside. Thank you for your continuing comments, they are appreciated.

  17. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    I agree with all the comments that you created a great sense of freedom. It was the image of the cows frozen, unbelieving that really captured it for me.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am so pleased to hear that, thank you for your comments.

  18. Rowena

    Thank you for sharing that image of the cattle running for freedom. It was very moving. I really enjoyed your take on the prompt. Well done. xx Rowena

    1. Michael Humphris

      It is lovely to see cattle being released after they have over wintered. Thank you for your kind comments.

  19. Keith's Ramblings

    I really felt that feeling of freedom as I read this. Brilliant.

    Click to read my 100 words!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Keith I am grateful for your feedback, thank you. Mike

  20. Clare Hempstead

    I felt the sense of freedom in this. It was expertly described.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Clare

  21. Patrick Prinsloo

    Great take. I assume all the clocks had stopped too. But I’m not sure that anybody would remember what cattle were, let alone the seasons.

    1. Michael Humphris

      You are right, but then perhaps the narrator is omnipotent! Your comments will help greatly with my planning of the central section of this novella.

  22. rgayer55

    They should have an abundance of natural fertilizer after keeping the cattle penned up so long. I can almost smell the fresh air.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It certainly did smell, they were glad to get out.

  23. plaridel

    oh, the feel of fresh air. it must be liberating, indeed.

    1. Michael Humphris

      So true; at least I alway find it so.

  24. joseph elon lillie

    A great capture of a possible tomorrow.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Let’s hope that the future is brighter, than many of us fear. Thank you for your comment.

      1. joseph elon lillie

        Most welcome.

  25. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    Well, described. I do know how they felt that day!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dawn,

  26. mandibelle16

    Indeed after a century of people living life locked up that would be such relief to be let out if the tunnels and see sunlight. The comparison to cattle is very apt.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for the positive comment, it is appreciated

  27. mandibelle16

    *sorry a meant millennia not century

  28. gahlearner

    Great writing, the feeling of liberation is so real. And I love the concept. Humans are very adaptive, but experiencing the freedom of a planet after being cooped up for so long… marvellous.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, this piece of flash fiction has its roots in a novella that I am trying to develope/write.

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