An Unsure Future

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Dominic had taken charge of our ancestors urns. Their colourful exteriors belying their contents. With the history of our race contained within they are the key to our future. The authorities do not wish us to have a future, for our religion   is feared.

The only route left open to us, a rusting suspension bridge. With Dominic leading the way I crossed in horror, for I had seen the ants chewing through the rotten supportive rope ties. Leaving our burnt out village behind, I could only trust that what waited ahead, surely must be better than the raging river below.

This Post Has 45 Comments

  1. neilmacdon

    That has the makings of a great saga

    1. Michael Humphris

      I thank you kind sir. If only I had the stamina of old.

  2. Iain Kelly

    Religious persecution at it’s worst – all too real. Nicely done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Iain, I dislike religious persecution of any kind,

  3. yarnspinnerr

    Leaves one wanting for more.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thanking you Yarnspinnerr, I wish that I had the mental stamina, maybe in time.

  4. granonine

    I’m with yarnspinner. More, please đŸ™‚

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thanking you granonine, I will have to find more stamina first.

  5. Dale

    That was a great opener to a potential longer story, Michael! I could so feel their tension.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dale. There are so many stories that I need to develope.

      1. Dale

        I feel you!!

  6. Varad

    This has great potential, Michael. I’d love to read more.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Varad, I have so many stories that I desire to develope more!

  7. Alicia Jamtaas

    Whoa! The ants. What a great bit in the story. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much, Alicia

  8. ceayr

    Cheerful as ever, Michael!
    Nicely written.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Cheerfully sad that me, always happens when I get philosophical.

  9. Keith's Ramblings

    You’ve left us all wanting more! Excellent.

    Click to read my FriFic!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Keith, I enjoy reading your postings, I try to comment, not sure if my comments get through.

  10. Moon

    Great build-up, Michael. Wonder where and what the story would finally lead to. Amazing work!

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is so kind. I also wish that I had the drive to develope this story, but then perhaps some stories are best left unfinished. I find it all to easy to sometimes spoil them!

  11. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael

    Tense and riveting.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      So pleased to hear that from a great writer like you. Thank you Rochelle

  12. pennygadd51

    All too real. I hope they make it to safety and can live in peace.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am not sure that I could see their future. Safety and peace is so important

  13. Sarah Ann

    The vision of ants chewing the bridge ropes, the river below, you paint an a strong picture of fear and desperation.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sarah, desperation was what I was aiming for. I am pleased to know that came over.

  14. magarisa

    I wonder if they make it across the bridge. Great story!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I did write a longer version of this story, in which the bridge fell, but they survived. So far.

      1. magarisa

        Ah, good to know. Are you going to continue writing the story?

        1. Michael Humphris

          I would never say no. But at present I am about to try and put together a novella length book. Plus I hope to design the cover and some illustrations myself. I am also working on three differing Model Railway layout and various other projects. I once joked that if I lived to be five hundred years old, I would still not have finished all the stories that I have started.

          1. magarisa

            I think it’s great to have so many projects on the go. When you’re doing something for yourself rather than for someone else, you don’t need to worry about deadlines.

          2. Michael Humphris

            Hi Magarisa, these days deadlines just cause me to go slower,

          3. magarisa

            I think it’s great to have so many projects on the go; it keeps the mind active. When you’re doing something for yourself, you don’t need to worry about deadlines.

  15. Susan A Eames

    That was a thought provoking little tale.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Susan, thought provoking is so right

  16. michaelwynnauthor

    Very evocative, Michael. The first steps into the unknown with no way back. They have no choice but you just know it’s going to be dangerous

    1. Michael Humphris

      That’s true Michael, thank you. There are so many short stories and pieces of flash that I would like to develope more.

  17. mandibelle16

    I hope they make it across with their precious urns. I wonder why the urns are so vital to the continuation of their religion.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Now that’s the question I wanted to ask them.

  18. Liz Young

    Scary stuff – I would love to read the rest of the story!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Liz, I would I think enjoy writing it, but time is against me.

  19. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    Good story, one of your best.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It is lovely to get such a cdomment, thank you Dawn

      1. lingeringvisions by Dawn

        Y/W

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