My letter home

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Apartment 2119
Finkah
Nepal

Dear Daughter
I need to update you on events here, I am setting out on a journey, starting with a retreat in Finkah at my local monastery. They have isolated huts set within a gorge full of flowers. There I will review my life’s work. It may be like looking into a mirror. I expect the images I see, may not be to my liking. As you know my mantra has been to ensure that the path I follow has been improved when I pass. So I must ask forgiveness from you, for what is to follow.

Apartments at Finkah Nepal

Apartments at Finkah Nepal

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  1. neilmacdon

    Intriguing, Michael

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Neil, intriguing and worrying.

  2. Sandra

    Sounds worrying.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Susan. I agree that this letter could be see as worrying.

  3. Alice Audrey

    Makes me really wonder what is to follow.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am also wondering, Alice, I appreciated you taking the time to comment.

  4. Iain Kelly

    I like the idea of a retreat to contemplate.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Iain. Retreats can be good, but in this case I am wondering if there is another reason for the retreat.

  5. Edith M. Field

    There is a powerful sense of isolation here. The physical separation of the huts. The solitary review of the father’s life and a possible disconnect between him and his daughter. The letter has been written. I wonder if it has been sent . . . It seems unfinished, as if the father could say no more. A heart-rending account, Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      So pleased to read your comment, Edith. As I was concerned that the feeling of isolation might not be clear enough… I rather struggled to stay within the word count. Historically I have not been a letter writer, so this week I decided to challenge myself. I left the letter unfinished for quite a few reasons, mainly however as I felt there may more to come.

  6. granonine

    This has a rather ominous feel to it. Good job of leaving us hanging 🙂

    1. abhiray59

      Very nice way of using the photo prompt. I liked the message. Introspection is like looking into a mirror. Beautiful!

    2. Michael Humphris

      I am pleased to read ominous, thank you granonine

  7. Lynn Love

    Oh, dear! I fear for your MC, wonder what he has planned and what has happened through his life to drive him here. Well written Michael

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am asking the same questions, and do not know if I will get a response. Thank you Lynn

      1. Lynn Love

        My pleasure

  8. Keith's Ramblings

    This does not bode well I fear.. I wonder….

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    1. Michael Humphris

      Ha ha, I wondered also. Good to see you back,

  9. yarnspinnerr

    Exploring one;s psyche is a dangerous business.

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is true, although whether that is what he is up to, I don’t know, as so far this character is not co-operating.

  10. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    Thoughtful and Evocative. Nicely done. I can’t help wonder what’s to follow.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      I also wonder that, but so far this character is rather silence, which is a pity. I was looking forward to exploring Nepal

  11. jillyfunnell

    I definitely got a sense of separation and impending doom from the unfinished letter. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Jill I did find myself wondering if he had to flee before the letter was complete.

  12. pennygadd51

    The idea of reflecting on one’s life in an isolated place of beauty sounds rather attractive – at first. Then you show us the man’s apprehension, and his fear that he has fallen short of his (admirable) mantra. What has happened to shake his confidence in how he’s lived his life, I wonder?

    1. Michael Humphris

      Penny although my character seems to know what he is about, I must admit that I am rather unsure at present what is going to happen to him and his daughter

  13. Dale

    I really liked this, Michael. He is ready to face whatever he has done or seen so that he may move forward…

    1. Michael Humphris

      So pleased to read your feedback Dale. I must admit that at present I am unsure what is about to occur in this characters life.

  14. Andrea LeDew

    Two things I noticed: First, that he focussed on his mantra “to improve” things around him. This could be a do-gooder’s mantra, or a dictator’s.

    Second, that he is asking forgiveness in advance, for something he is about to do, which will somehow improve the path (presumably), perhaps make up for past deeds, but also harm or emotionally crush or disappoint the daughter. My bet is, he’s changing his will.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Andrea, I was pleased to read your feedback, which was in line with how at first I saw this story developing. However now I find myself wondering about why he sent a primitive drawing to his daughter with the letter. Which may mean that there could be another angle to the story. Time and the next prompt may deliver the answer, I hope so

  15. lisarey1990

    Very intriguing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Intriguing will do for me, thank you.

  16. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I hope that he can find things that make it better for his daughter.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for commenting Bjorn, sadly I am confused as to how this particular story may pan out

  17. Jelli

    Interesting little missal here. Am intrigued and want to know more.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Jelli. It does seem that this story is developing along the lines of a rubric. I myself am quite unsure if and how it might develop.

  18. theministryofshrawleywalks

    Oh dear, what is to come? Love the little picture too.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, more is on the way.

  19. Sarah Ann

    An intriguing letter – begging the question of what he might write at the end of his retreat.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, Sarah Ann. You have set me a task at some piont I fear.

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