Border Town

Photo credit Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Photo credit Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Each day the captain was reluctant to approach his window, but he always did and always he opened it wide. He would sit and reflect on all the places that he had been. Then his vision would be drawn across the river to a red brick house with a veranda, to a young priest who each morning walked back and forth reading, always the priests hands appeared golden from the gold leafed pages.

The captain wished that he could visit the priest; so many sins, so many deaths, such gnawing guilt over his own blood red hands, he desperately wanted absolution.

 

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  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I like this Michael.. the river is such a separation, life is the balance between good and evil… left and right… and we can never find a balance lacking bridges.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Bjorn,

  2. mickwynn2013

    I like this. You get the impression he wants to join the priest on one level but there is more than just the river keeping them apart

    1. Michael Humphris

      It will be hard to cross the river, I suppose it may depend on how bad he has been. Thank you Mick.

  3. aliciajamtaas

    The things he must have done. How interesting that the captain ended up living right across from a priest. Wonderful take on the prompt.
    (priests hands should be priest’s hands)

    1. Michael Humphris

      For the author of this piece what he has done would be the next challenge. Thanks for reading

  4. Sandra

    The hand comparisons worked well. Good one.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, It always amazes me what the photo prompt delivers.

  5. liz young

    I hope he makes it across the river before he dies with all that guilt on his soul.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Me to, I am not sure about what his secret is.

  6. Caerlynn Nash

    Beautifully written. Sad things, guilt and regret.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you very much.

  7. gahlearner

    I liked the hand comparison too. Good story.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you,

  8. draliman

    I like the way he’s drawn to watch the priest, his hope for absolution, even though it’s done reluctantly. I wonder if he’ll ever take the final step and cross the river?

    1. Michael Humphris

      He is not sure that he deserves absolution. Thank you for commenting. Mike

  9. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    This is a wonderful premise and I want to know more about their story. I think this could be something, the friendship and confessions. I hope you expand on it.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dawn,

  10. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    One has to wonder what the captain has done. The sense of longing is tangible in this piece. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Rochelle, the picture prompt was great this week,

  11. plaridel

    if he waves at the priest, maybe he’ll come and pay him a visit.

    1. Michael Humphris

      He is to set in his ways to think about waving. Thanks for commenting

  12. Alice Audrey

    He should get out and look for a bridge. Better than wallowing in sin.

  13. spicedmullings

    Great Mike. So profound in its simplicity!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, thank you

  14. erinleary

    Absolution is a noble goal. I hope he finds peace!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Me to, as the author of this piece I still do not know what he is guilty of! Thank you for your comment. Mike

  15. ansumani

    I hope your MC gets his absolution. Nice writing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, the prompt photo was a great help this time.

  16. rgayer55

    We all stand in need of forgiveness. And at some point, we must forgive ourselves.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Very true. Thanks for reading and commenting.

  17. Margaret

    I like the tension in his character – he’s very conflicted about what he needs and how to get it. I want him to stop wallowing and start doing something about it. Very interesting. I like your title, too.

    1. Michael Humphris

      You are right to say that he is in conflict, perhaps he see’s his past in a worse light than he should

  18. patriciaruthsusan

    The man is judging himself. He has lost the hope of being forgiven and is causing his own suffering. Just across the river is forgiveness but he can’t summon the courage to ask for it. How sad. Well done, Mike. —- Suzanne

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Patrica, he is certainly judging himself, perhaps he is over reacting to what he has done.

  19. jellico84

    Awesomely compiled!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you very much.

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