Smash and Grab

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Photo copyright: Sarah Potter

I feared my ribs would break as the blast lifted then smashed me against a wall. Bullets sailed past me as I crawled into a sideboard. The sound of crunching rubble and a chair being moved sharpened my mind. Boots appeared, adorned with traces of blood and brain matter. I smelt fear, my fear, as the voice of our opponents assaulted my ears. Orders where given out. I felt the tickle of urine wash my face as one of the enemy’s fighters released themselves against my hiding place. I crawled out after what seemed an eternity, the enemy’s startled eyes took in my alien form.


Footnote: yesterday whilst I waited for the WordPress to sort its self out, I ended up writing a second story for this weeks prompt. As waste not is my moto, I have posted it. It seems that one prompt picture will deliver several differing stories for me.

This Post Has 15 Comments

  1. neilmacdon

    I’m not sure why it crawled out. Was this surrender? A surprise attack?

    1. Michael Humphris

      It certainly was not surrender, the alien perhaps thought the coast was clear.

  2. Dale

    I was wondering why it left its hiding space too…

    1. Michael Humphris

      Dale, I believe it thought it was alone, in my story I sadly did not manage to convey how much time had passed since the alien went into hiding

      1. Dale

        That makes sense. Guess it just needed an extra ‘”thinking himself alone…”
        Was a wonderful story though!

        1. Michael Humphris

          Thank you Dale; In time I revisit each posted story and revise them.t Then I print a hard copy which I insert into soft covered booklets. I will take note about [thinking him/itself alone] mike

  3. wmqcolby

    Pretty good second story there, Mike. I felt I was there.
    I’m glad you wrote it, too. A nice little extra special something for us.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for all the comments, I really appreciate them,

  4. Michael Wynn

    Good story, Mike. I thought you captured the fear well

  5. patriciaruthsusan

    Great ending twist, Mike. Good description and writing. Good writing on your other story also. 🙂 — Suzanne

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Suzanne, it was good to get your feedback, and to learn a little about Pune – I have been to Goa and now regret not taking the train north as I once hoped to do.

  6. Nan Falkner

    Michael, you are very good at writing so the reader can easily picture your story – Heck, you scared me! Great fun! Nan

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for your kind comments,they are appreciated.

  7. Sarah Potter Writes

    I liked the alien twist at the end of this story, Michael. It caught me quite by surprise.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sarah, surprise was what I was looking for.

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