Derwentwater

Copyright Rochelle

Copyright Rochelle

The purest blue sharply defines the mountains, cascading down to Derwentwater.
Luxuriating in gentle sunlight.

I am cooled by pure air from the lake.

I see stark rock faces breaking the burgeoning green of May.

Ancient tracks slither, guiding shepherds, fell walkers and even day trippers.

Yet who see’s the shimmering water through dappled leafs.

As the mellow warmth calls out relax.

Whilst geese call their young to hand and idle craft bob at anchor.

Silhouettes of pleasure on steel blue Derwentwater.

 

 

At present I am taking a short break on the shores of Derwentwater in the English Lakes. The above poem? was penned yesterday, so it seemed only appropriate to use it for today’s prompt.

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  1. neilmacdon

    I see the watercolour. If I may suggest, I’d be tempted to take out some of the adjectives – particularly burgeoning and mellow – less is often more

    1. Michael Humphris

      What you say is true, but I just fell in love again and could not stop writing.

      1. neilmacdon

        Fair enough

  2. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    Sage advice from Neil. I did like your poem. You made me want to visit Derwentwater. Glad the prompt worked for you. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Neil’s advise was right, it was a fabulous sunny day when I wrote this piece. When I saw the prompt, I very nearly wrote about slipping under the water, but I did not want to bury the joy of Lakeland retreat.

  3. ceayr

    While I make no claim to know aught of poetry, I enjoyed this, and do not agree with my admittedly more learned friends above.
    But please don’t tell Rochelle!

    1. Michael Humphris

      The Lake District poet approved of silent moments, so my silence is given. I am so pleased you liked it as it is. Mike

  4. Joe Owens

    I thought you had concocted Derwentwater as “the Big Pond” is between you and me in America. Very nice poetry and a great coincidence that you could use it today!

    1. Michael Humphris

      If the big pond was as small as Derwentwater, I would gladly visit the USA weekly for pancakes and maple syrup, at a dinner I knew south of New York.

      1. Joe Owens

        I want one day to “hop” the pond and see your country. I know my list of places to see will quickly outstrip the time I can spare.

        1. Michael Humphris

          If only we could beam in and out Star Trex fashion.

  5. helenmidgley

    I can visualise the lakes so clearly, great job 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      I really appreciate this comment. Thank you Helen.

  6. Lynn Love

    A lovely image of the Lakes, Michael. Such a gorgeous place to visit and captured so wonderfully in your poem 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, Lynn, The Lake District delivers so much for a writer. I had almost forgotten how much.

      1. Lynn Love

        It’s obviously inspiring you no end! Hope you enjoy the rest if your time there 🙂

        1. Michael Humphris

          It’s hard not to be inspired. I will

          1. Lynn Love

            🙂

  7. paulmclem

    Interestingly I didn’t view this as a poem, just a lush piece of prose. Very calming.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I always struggle with rhythm, be it in poetry or music, but the Lake District is so very lush this week.

  8. mickwynn2013

    I know Derwent water and you’ve done a great job with this. I wouldn’t have said to take out the adjectives, it worked for me as is.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Mick, The trees here are very lush this year, must be all the rain. But sadly the centre of Cockermouth has suffered so bad from flooding.

  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    This is almost like a song.. so beautiful, and yes I do love the wonder of nature too.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so very much, Bjorn. I really appreciate your comment. Mike

      1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

        If you ever want to link up to a poetrysite check out dVerse… 🙂 I think you might find a few familiar faces.

  10. Josslyn Rae Turner

    A beautiful poem! 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Josslyn.

      1. Josslyn Rae Turner

        You’re welcome! 🙂

  11. Dale

    This was lovely indeed! Adjective away! (like my turning it into a verb?) You might want to lose the apostrophe on sees, though… 😉

    1. Michael Humphris

      O dear, I must have been a Viking who murdered a scribe, for apostrophes and me don’t go together.

      1. Dale

        LOL!!!

  12. spicedmullings

    Beautiful descriptive poem.
    Makes me want to go there!

    1. Michael Humphris

      The real credit belongs to nature and Derwentwater. But thank you. Mike

  13. jellico84

    Beautiful scene, makes me wish I was there.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It is great walking county, when nature and age allows.

  14. wmqcolby

    Gee, that’s nice, Michael. It has a flavor like Carrickfergus or Isle of Innisfree. Very nice. Thank-you! 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, When I am at Derwentwater, I feel very close to Ireland,

  15. mjlstories

    I was planning on returning one day as a seagull and living in Dorset (all those cream teas) but think I’ll change that to a goose on Derwentwater. Loverly!

    1. Michael Humphris

      They are feeding the geese well, made me think about Christmas dinner.

  16. liz young

    Clearly you love the place! I like ‘ancient tracks slither’.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I do, but these days I also slither very well, on the rare occasions that I venture to try walking in the mountains.

  17. gahlearner

    This is beautiful and I too like it just as it is. Reading it gives me a relaxed feeling.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much, thank you.

  18. Dreamer of Dreams

    Beautiful imagery, very peaceful and soothing prose-poem!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you very much.

      1. Dreamer of Dreams

        My pleasure!

  19. rgayer55

    I enjoyed this very much. The extra adjectives didn’t bother me. It sounds like a beautiful place.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It certainly can be if it’s not to busy.

  20. patrickprinsloo

    Lovely. And I’m off to Coniston Water tomorrow.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am envious. When at Coniston I love to visit Brantwood the former home of John Ruskin. Last time I was there they also had a cafe and some interesting art in the Gallery. Then there is the steam yacht Gondola

  21. freyathewriter

    I want to re-visit Derwentwater now! Lovely.

    1. Michael Humphris

      You are too kind. May I recommend not visiting Derwentwater till the bank holiday week is over.

      1. freyathewriter

        Recommendation heartily accepted. 🙂

  22. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

    It sounds like a nice place to visit.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It certainly is, but then there are so many interesting and beautiful places around the world to see.

  23. Dawn Quyle Landau

    A wonderful response to this prompt, Michael, and it sounds like paradise! Is that the Lake District? If so, I love it there!

    1. Michael Humphris

      I was staying close to the Lodore Falls over looking Derwentwater, in a slightly quieter part of the Lake District, it was inspiring.

      1. Dawn Quyle Landau

        Sounds fantastic. We loved our visit to the Lake District, though we did not get enough time… there is so much to see!

  24. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    I enjoyed this. It made me feel quite peaceful.

  25. Siobhan McNamara

    Your poem worked very well in capturing that mix of gentle calm and constant movement that draws us to such places

  26. patriciaruthsusan

    Beautiful description of the lake and surrounding area, Michael. Well written. 🙂 — Suzanne

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