A writer on holiday

Photo copyright:J S Brand

Photo copyright:J S Brand

Sometimes one will come across a companion when dining. Today that occurred. I was enjoying my morning coffee, sat in a cafe with my feet up when a girl walked in. Nothing unusual, I hear you say. Well perhaps. But if you could have seen her. Head held high, her dress filthy, whilst her hair was thick with river mud and tangled with flotsam. But she entered the cafe as if she had not a care in the world. But I saw the torn nails and blood stained legs. ‘Would I buy her a drink’.

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  1. James

    Sounds like she could use one.

    1. Michael Humphris

      This story grew out of a chance meeting that occurred between myself and a tribal princess!!!

  2. neilmacdon

    hell, yes

    1. Michael Humphris

      To true, and I did. Thank you Neil

  3. Anita

    She does need a drink.
    Hope she feels better.

    1. Michael Humphris

      She certainly needed a drink, then help to return to her family. This story developed from a chance meeting between myself and a princess !

  4. Iain Kelly

    Maybe a pastry too?

    1. Michael Humphris

      There was no pastry’s at this cafe: but it was a safe place that encourged independence !

  5. Dale

    She needs more than a drink…

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is true Dale. Although the story is total fiction. I did know the young lady, and I brought her coffee.

      1. Dale

        Nice.

      2. Dale

        So very nice.

  6. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    Perhaps he should buy her drinks, dinner and a bath.

    Questions…”dinning?” “was sat?”

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Rochelle, I will correct ‘dinning’. In my defence at the time I was writing and posting this story, I had very limited time available to access the Internet to post my story… Unfortunately ‘was sat’ shows my rural roots. I have now rephrased that also. and in so doing reduced my word count. Thank you again Rochelle. Mike

  7. Lynn Love

    That’s intriguing Michael – what on hearth has happened to her? Maybe he’ll learn more over a drink?

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Lynn, A writer must always listen. Occasionally that’s how stories start. She was running from a rival tribe, who wanted to abduct her, she took to the river to escape them.

      1. Lynn Love

        She needs to keep on running …

  8. Susan A Eames

    I enjoyed reading this story because you left me with so much to ponder! The characters were really well drawn! Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Susan. It perhaps helped that the characters were real individuals. I thank heavens that the story was fictional.

  9. pennygadd51

    A woman of great courage, I think. There’s a lot more to know about her past and her future. This would make a great opening for a novel!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Penny, I think you are right about it being the start for a novel. In fact as I write this comment, I have started to see how I might incorporate some part of the story into another novella that I am planning. Thank you again. Mike

  10. Jelli

    Like Penny said, a woman of great courage. Definitely in need of a good meal, maybe a hot bath and a little pampering to boot. Maybe even a pollyanna story just beginning… Love it!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Jelli, I hope you are feeling much better. I am glad that you enjoyed this story, Penny’s comment has sparked an idea in my mind as to how I might incorporate some of this piece of flash into a novella that I am planning to write. Thank you once again for commenting, it is appreciated. Mike

      1. Jelli

        Go for it, Michael! I think it would make a great larger story.

  11. James McEwan

    She’s a fighter and a keeper. An interesting read.

    1. Michael Humphris

      That is kind of you to say, thank you James.

  12. Keith's Ramblings

    Sounds like she needs something stronger than coffee! Nice one Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      She started with clean water. But I have a feeling that then maybe a ‘local’ spirit might be appropriate

  13. granonine

    She needs a champion as well as a drink. Although it does seem as if she handled whatever happened.

    1. Michael Humphris

      She has temporarily escaped those who were attempting to kidnap her. But she now needs help from the writer, they will have to figure out how she can stay safe.

  14. Joan

    Which drink exactly

    1. Michael Humphris

      Water I hope she needs to keep a clear head.

  15. Alicia Jamtaas

    You left me wondering what happened to this poor woman. Nicely done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I left myself wondering that also. Thank you Alicia

  16. yarnspinnerr

    I too would. Perfect flash.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It is kind of you to say that, thank you yarnspinnerr

  17. Norma

    Sounds like she really needed that drink and some ears to hear her story. Nice snippet from the writer’s life, Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Norma. This writer hopes to incorporate her story at some point into a novella. Mike

      1. Norma

        That sounds like a good idea, Mike. 🙂

  18. Dahlia

    I am pleased that the protagonist didnt retreat from her but offered to help. Good one Michael 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dahlia. With this story I wanted to break the limit of a hundred words.

  19. Sarah Ann

    This is such a tantalising opener, leaving us wondering how she got into that state. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sarah, With this story at the time I did want to say more.

  20. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I would buy her a full breakfast… sounds like she needs it.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Bjorn. There are times when it is the right thing to do.

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