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Hey man you got a light. Bugger off kid. Yer mum would kill me if she saw you smoking. But man there’s nothing else to do in this place since the ship yards shut down. Well ‘get on your bike’ go look for work in one of them plush southern cities. Them’s got enough grass and wealth to feed you for your whole life.
But mam would kill me if I left home. Who would walk the cat? Take it with you kid, you could be like Dick Whittington. Dick Whittington? O hell… you’d better go to the library and learn to read.

Footnote: Get ’Onyerbike’ is a miss quote, from a speech by Norman Tebbit.

A fine day at Mevagissey
A fine day at Mevagissey
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    1. I set out to write Sci fi, but a piece of dialogue took over. Fortunately later in the day, whilst waiting for an appointment, I did manage to make some progress on a piece of Sci fi, I am attempting to write.

    1. Thank you Iain, I set out to write a piece of Sci fi, but then wrote an unrelated diaolouge, strange! Writing dialogue is not really my forte. I am not over happy with what arrived, but waste not is my middle name.

  1. You succinctly sum up one of the effects of poverty. You can’t improve your position in life because you’ve not been properly educated. The system is stacked against the poor, and it’s getting worse. Good for you writing about it.

    1. Thank you Penny, I am glad that came over. I was not totally happy with this piece of writing. But I am not one for wasting anything I write. I agree that in education inequality can really disadvantage many who are poor.

  2. Now youve got Elvis Costello’s “shipbuilding” running through my head! Nice voice in this, and thoughts about the rugged reality of technogy fading into obsolescence.

    1. Sorry about the music worm. It does seem that robots with artificial intelligence will make some of us obsolescent. So I hope that many lost arts and craft will return to replace decaying industries

  3. This is great, Michael. I just wish you would separate the voices into different lines… It would make it so much easier to understand the change from one to another.

    1. At one piont I did consider doing just that Dale. It is something that I would usually do. However when I started to write this story I had a very difference scenario in mind, which did not include any dialogue. In the end the dialogue won out. At present I am trying to experiment a ‘little’ with the styles and content of what I write and post. I was however really pleased to learn about the way the dialogue read. Mike

  4. Excellent, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Great job in creating the characters and the plot through dialogue. I don’t do well with dialogue and am working on it. Took some pointers from this. =)

    1. So pleased to read your comment, I also find writing dialogue difficult. At present I am attempting to challenge my writing style, and try to post something’s that may come across different.

          1. I’m not a scholar but I don’t agree. =) There are times I get lost in who said what with dialogue, but yours was smooth and I knew who was speaking. You don’t even include the “he said,” or anything. Hope that made sense! haha

          2. Getting a flowing dialogue between characters is challenging. I have found studying the way other writers handle dialogue has helped me. They say that one never stops learning, certainly for me that is true.

    1. I have know cat’s that walked alongside a member of their extended human family. Indeed one of these cats adopted me, he would just appear at various points as I was walking home with my present dog, then he would trot home alongside us. Passing people found it hilarious. He was however a very special type of cat. Once he chased away three overweight labradors because they were pestering a young dog. He chased them furiously, and for quite a distance.

  5. It’s so easy to get discouraged and give up. Libraries can open paths to information that gives us a new path. Walk the cat made me laugh. I know it happens, but it’s still a weird concept for me.

    1. Libraries should be able to offer wide ranging openings to new concepts. Sadly some libraries are now failing in that concept. … I have know cat’s that walked alongside a member of their extended human family. Indeed one of these cats adopted me, he would just appear at various points as I was walking home with my present dog, then he would trot home alongside us. Passing people found it hilarious. He was however a very special type of cat. Once he chased away three overweight labradors because they were pestering a young dog. He chased them furiously, and for quite a distance.

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