A Bike for Holly

Photo Copyright Peter Abbey

Photo Copyright Peter Abbey

Softened by wood and green lichen it might be, but the bridge was no path to freedom.  Yes there was the presence of nettles and leaf covered shrubbery at each end, but in reality each estate was just as grim as the other. On the two estates gangs ran riot, unemployment was the norm and drug use was common. The bridge just linked one hell with another.

Tony’s motor bike had a broken silencer, everyone knew when he was out and about. His job as a gang courier gave him some freedom till the day he was shot. Now Holly rides his bike.

This Post Has 20 Comments

  1. aliciajamtaas

    Maybe it pays to fix one’s bike – especially in the neighborhood you’ve painted.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I thought that, but Holly says the sound is her calling card. That its hard like her. but I am not sure that is really true.

  2. Iain Kelly

    Very evocative, great take on the prompt. The world you’ve created could be a great setting for a longer piece.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Iain. I would love to develop this story, but I would need to spend time on the estates, which would fill me with concern.

  3. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    Love the line about the bridge linking one hell to another. Atmospheric and evocative.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Rochelle, I really do value the feed back this week. mike

  4. gahlearner

    Great atmosphere, the descriptions are so vivid, I can see these kids roaming about. Great writing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I am very grateful for your positive support this week. I was unsure about the approach I took with this story. I had rewritten the posted story several times.

      1. gahlearner

        You did great.

        1. Michael Humphris

          Thank you so much.

  5. Dale

    I, too, liked the line about the bridge linking the two hells… so scarily real.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dale, seeing feed back really helps.

  6. Sandra

    Very vivid. I can well imagine the scenario.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sandra, I am really pleased to receive your feedback

  7. Mullingspice

    Bridge between two hells – eeks!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Eeks, that thats what i thought when i saw the photograph of the bridge, for it delivered memories of crossing such a bridge!

  8. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Wow a nicely told story that is all to real. I felt my heart lurch when I realized the implication of Holly having the bike.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I am so pleased that the implications for Holly came across. Thank you very much for commenting. Mike

  9. Michael Wynn

    Very evocative take on the prompt, I saw two rival estates at each end of the bridge but couldn’t develop the idea as you’ve have, well done

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Michael, I was fortunate the motorbike section arrived from being assaulted by the sound of a broken motorbike silencer on the morning that I wrote about Holly. I do enjoy being able to incorporate the events that occur around me. But I did hope that Billy might regain his sight, man up and take down the Werewolf.

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