Old Joe

This weeks prompt is provided by Louise

This weeks prompt is provided by Louise

I am scared mum, are you sure that he is harmless, he don’t look it. Always standing there, watching. He gives me the willies. He’s always there. As for that hat, it’s hideous, and he’s always got a flower in his button hole. He thinks that he is a lady killer.

Dad always had a flower in his button hole, and a cravat, and we know what he did, don’t we. I hope there’s a good lock on the gate. At least the brambles will stop him climbing the wall.

Do you think he’s got a gun. Old Joe don’t like him. Said that he’s a stuffed shirt, and that he’s got ants in his pants, and worms in his feet. It makes me feel sick thinking about it. It does. It’s no use I can’t go out to play whiles he’s there.

Mum what are those matches for?


Footnote: This is a short piece of fiction for a new writing site, that is new to me. The site is titled Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Well I aspire. I feel unsure about Old Joe, as a piece of writing, I was attempting to portray a young child talking, any feed back will be welcome. Mike.   Ps. Old Joe’s is the gardener.

This Post Has 12 Comments

  1. Priceless Joy

    Hahaha! I can only imagine what the matches are for. Sounds like this scarecrow is going to be scarce pretty soon! LOL! Cute story!

    1. Michael Humphris

      So pleased you liked it. Not sure if mums is not about to set a bad example here. Mike

      1. Priceless Joy

        Yes, I have to agree with you on that.

  2. IB Arora

    the second para has a tinge of mystery, and kids observe everything


    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, my aim was to try and put three stories into one, with this prompt. Sadly I failed. I envisaged three characters, the child, the mother and the gardener. The gardener was responsible for putting the flower on the scarecrow! He dreams of building a family, … And although the child liked the gardener, because of how her father had treated her mother she was fearful.

  3. milliethom

    Ooh, a lot of undertones in this one. Dad was obviously not a nice sort of fella. The story ends on an ominous note, too. I don’t think that scarecrow will be around for much longer.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I’m thinking that mum changes her mind, and the scare crow lives to see another day. Mike

      1. milliethom

        Hi Mike. Well, the story could continue that way. It would be a nicer ending for the scarecrow, although the child would need to find a way of not being scared of him. Stories can go in all sorts of directions – that’s the fun of them. 🙂

  4. Daisy in the Willows

    What is Mom planning to do? Poor scare crow – not even a sunflower can save him!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Fortunately mum had a rethink and the scare crow lived to see another day,

  5. jacquelineobyikocha

    There’s quite a lot of hidden tales going on here and that child is quite observant.

    1. Michael Humphris

      You are quite right, thank you for your comment. Mike

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