Coffee with Memories

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Her pockets full of shattered dreams she waited patiently. She wondered was what she was doing right. Boijim lay beside her as if asleep. But he was in a coma. He had been so since his battle with Titans underground inhabitants. Boijim’s space ship had taken a direct hit and had been sent spiralling into Saturns rings. A recovery craft had picked up his envac module, but not before it had been encased in frozen methane.

Rita and Boijim had planned every detail of this wedding over countless cups of coffee. Right down to which pairs of sun glasses they would take with them to earth for their honeymoon. She had decided that until Boijim came out of the coma, she would stay at his side; but as his wife. The marriage would go ahead as planned, the honeymoon could wait. Earth was going nowhere, like her, till Boijim recovered.

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  1. James

    Very interesting take on the prompt. I’m usually the one to turn just about anything into a piece of science fiction.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sorry James: I did not want to bin a piece of my old sci fi fantasy, so over a cup of coffee I reworked it. I do enjoy writing and reading sci fi, in the flash fiction format.

  2. gravadee

    Such a different alien story.Cute read

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    1. Michael Humphris

      It was a surprise to me to. When I first saw the prompt, I thought about writing a story based on a conversation over coffee,

  3. Iain Kelly

    An intergalactic battle from a pair of sunglasses and a cup of coffee – nice way to expand the prompt!

    1. Michael Humphris

      When I first saw the prompt, I thought about writing a story based on a conversation over coffee, so when I got sci fi it was a surprise.

  4. JS Brand

    I could have stared at the photo for ages and never have come up with this idea. Brilliant imagining and nice writing.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I have been mulling over a story about dragons on Saturns moon Titan. Then it got manipulated.

  5. yarnspinnerr

    Interesting and innovative write.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you yarnspinnerr, I twisted another story that was in my mind, and was surprised at what came out that.

      1. yarnspinnerr

        Ahh – It is said that there are only 7 basic plots in stories and all are a mix of these. Thanks for sharing.

        1. Michael Humphris

          Thank you yarnspinnerr, one of the special things about writing, is sharing ideas and knowledge. But with only seven plots to play with is feels hard to come up with something new.

          1. yarnspinnerr

            🙂 With just 4 base pairs each human has a unique DNA – with 7 plots there are infinite possibilities. 🙂

          2. Michael Humphris

            Now I think I can see DNA spiralling into a story!

          3. yarnspinnerr

            Look forward to reading it. 🙂

  6. mandibelle16

    A sad story in some ways. Even in the future with spaceships etc. there are still accidents and people ending up in comas. They haven’t managed to figure out how to wake people up. Maybe this guy just needs the coma to heal and will wake up. But maybe he’s brain dead and she won’t accept that he’s gone yet. How can they marry if he can’t say “I do” in some form or sign the right papers? Sad, maybe hope, but it seems his poor lady is goin g to have more tough times ahead. Great job!

    1. Michael Humphris

      So time ago there was a court case about a woman using her dead partners sperm. She got permission so I thought getting permission to marry will occur. I my mind Boijim will come out of the coma. Then the story could get interesting… In a longer draft of this story, I describe how they might wake him from the coma. Interestingly enough on tonight’s news, there was an article about a new method used to partly wake a man in France who had been in a coma for some time.

      1. mandibelle16

        Wow, that’s very neat. I’m going to have search for that article now lol. I’m glad in your story he wakes up!

        1. Michael Humphris

          Sorry I do not have a www link for you

          1. mandibelle16
  7. Priceless Joy

    Great story and very creative take on the prompt! So sad that her fiancé is in a coma. Love how you made it into an alien story.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you PJ. I love how a prompt can restructure a story that I was mulling over in my mind. My original story was centred around dragons and humans battling each other!!!

      1. Priceless Joy

        Yes, it is interesting how a prompt can lead a story!

  8. The Chad

    Great job. Love the first line especially. What a hook.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, I was pleased that this story worked.

  9. Varad

    A very different one from you, Michael. Did you and James decide to write for each other? Coming back to the story, I liked the way you have portrayed Rita. Loyalty is a very difficult trait to find among humans these days. Boijim is indeed lucky.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Loyalty is indeed a trait which seems to be under threat. James has reminded me that enjoy sci fi.

  10. Joyfrida

    Very creative. I enjoyed the read.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Pleased to hear that, thank you Joyfrida

  11. athling2001

    Great take on the prompt. I love that she is sticking by him even without knowing if he will ever awake. He is a lucky guy in more than one way.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you, athling, she has faith that he will wake from his coma

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