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Shadowlands

Copyright Jan Marler Morrill
Shadowlands Copyright Jan Marler Morrill

 

The instructions had been clear, she was to transfer five million euros to a off shore account. She had then been told to fly out to Monaco where she had been ordered to drive to Spain. Now she was walking down this isolated alley and looking for a blue door.

Your new passport senorita, enjoy Colombia. Light and shadows that’s all Carol saw. She could not really know what awaited her when she finally turned the corner at the end of the alley and left her old life behind. So why did she feel as if she was on a downward path to hell.

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      1. I always wonder how people who write mysteries and thrillers do what they do. There’s so much to know and learn about!
        I thought you did a great job of making it more an internal struggle. That worked for me.

  1. Great suspenseful buildup. I’m glad you got out of the comfort zone on this one. I understand completely how that feels since I wrote a few stories that really weren’t my forte, either.

    Did a great job, Michael! Congratulations on the courage to do it.

  2. Interesting twist at the end. “Left her old life behind”, normally a line about redemption, but “downward spiral to hell” indicates loss. I hope she finds redemption.

    1. Thank you Alice, you may write it for me, then again I have just had a thought about dropping her character into one of my many unfinished stories. Thank you for the idea. Mike

    1. Hi Dawn, you are right when I wrote this piece of fiction, the outcome I had in mind was very ominous. But now I am not so sure, perhaps a knight in shining armour will rescue her.

  3. Good tension, Mike. She must have that terrible feeling for some reason. It sounds as if she’s cut herself off from her past for good and that’s scary. The man who gave her the passport seemed like a slimy character. It doesn’t bode well for her. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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