Life Saving Hypnosis.

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Hello Mrs Ashcanazig, my name is Iswar, I am a hypnotist.  The police have asked me to help you see if you can recall the details of the vehicle that you saw leaving your home. …

You saw the number plate, but can’t recall it. We really need that number, to get your child back. You said it was a inky blue booted VW.

Your mothers age 82 – the age of your child 18 weeks, yes I got that. The middle three numbers – 5 the age of your other child. 84 the age of your father. The driver you knew him? Your partner!

This Post Has 35 Comments

  1. granonine

    Ugh. Parental kidnapping. So much grief.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It is such a sad subject, that I now regret writing this piece of flash fiction.

      1. granonine

        Oh no, don’t regret it! It’s a part of life today that we need to acknowledge, and realize it for the crime that it is. You did such a good job with it.

        1. Michael Humphris

          Thank you granonine. My inner muse tells me that I could have handled the subject matter differently. But then I expect many writers feel that at times.

          1. Kelvin M. Knight's blog

            I think you may be onto something there, Michael. Trust your inner muse, along with your inner critic! I enjoyed this piece, could see the timepiece swinging before her eyes and the mechanical repeating of the information by the hypnotists – which is probably not how they work at all now – there’s probably an app or something!

          2. Michael Humphris

            After reading your comments Kelvin, I am glad now that I posted this story. Thank you.

          3. granonine

            Yes, that happens. But for these quickly written little stories, I find that I don’t tend to rewrite them, either in my head or in actuality. It’s the longer stuff I struggle with more.

          4. Michael Humphris

            At some piont I review then print and bind all my Flash stories, just for my own memoirs. But I know what you mean about longer stuff.

  2. Nan Falkner

    Creepy partner – I WANT TO BE ON THE JURY! Good story! Nan

    1. Michael Humphris

      I will make a note of your request, Nan.

  3. Sandra

    Shocking. But it happens unfortunately. Well done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sandra.

  4. draliman

    At least the kid is unlikely to be in too much danger, I guess.

    1. Michael Humphris

      As the author I hope not. Thank you draliman.

  5. Iain Kelly

    A good bit of hypnosis. I’m confidant he’ll be caught now!

    1. Michael Humphris

      From the little I remember when writing this story, I am not so sure he will be caught. I remember considering/thinking that there was a political twist to this story!

  6. Clare Hempstead

    Hopefully, the child will return soon safe and well..

    1. Michael Humphris

      I hope so, but I fear this story has another angle/side to it

  7. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    Strange little tale. Good use of the prompt.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      It was a strange tale for me, I have no idea where it came from.

      1. yarnspinnerr

        I was also wondering about the inspiration behind the deductive process. I find this very intriguing.

        1. Michael Humphris

          Hypnosis was not my intended subject for this story, but it took over! Many years back when working in the field of psychiatry, I witnessed the use of basic hypnosis, with mixed results. Perhaps that is were this story came from?

          1. yarnspinnerr

            Thank you for sharing this information. Our inspirations and their relations to our experiences are often convoluted. It is an interesting subject for me.

          2. Michael Humphris

            Me to, thank you Yarnspinnerr

  8. wmqcolby

    Great job, Mike! You had a great idea that went into words very well.

    Wonderful!

    1. Michael Humphris

      My vision must have been fixed on the number plate, for I did not intend to write a story about hypnosis, usually I know my story outline before I start writing. This time I did not. I thank you for your support. Mike

      1. wmqcolby

        Hey, whatever works, you know? 😉

  9. gahlearner

    This is a sad and tragical subject, but so well written, Michael. I’m in awe like, piece by tiny peace you revealed the tragedy and gave us the information we (and the police) needed.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Your comment was most welcome, as I was unsure about the story. Thank you.

  10. Michael Wynn

    Nicely done Michael, I like the way the hypnotist wheedles out the information.

    1. Michael Humphris

      tThank you Michael, I was raher unsure that the story line worked, so I am pleased to get your comments

  11. Sascha Darlington

    I like what you’ve done here, a very different take on the prompt!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Sascha

  12. Dahlia

    I really liked your take on the prompt Michael 🙂

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dahila

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