Flotsam 1948

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Judy loved walking the beach, today she loved the harsh wind, it was keeping people at home so she had the beach to herself. Judy enjoyed the isolation it was her time to think, to dream and plan, she really needed inspiration today. Her publisher wanted a outline for her next story, ‘two novels a year Judy, it keeps your readers engaged’. She could hear him now, but all she wanted today was to clear the flotsam out of her mind. Then the images came fast, as her life flashed before her. A mine had removed her leg.

 

Footnote

Undertaking research for this story I was once again reminded of the horrors of strife, around the world every day people are dying due to abandoned land mines. It is bizarre where a picture will take you.

This Post Has 41 Comments

  1. neilmacdon

    I was more surprised than she was by the mine

    1. Michael Humphris

      It surprised me to, i was thinking of her being out looking for amber. Then the land mine arrived. It was not in my original idea for this story.

  2. rochellewisoff

    Dear Michael,

    Wow. No wonder she wanted some time to herself.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Michael Humphris

      I was surprised by the outcome of this story, my original idea was to write about someone out beach combing for Amber.

  3. Iain Kelly

    Loved the ‘flotsam of her mind’, and of course that she was a writer looking for some peace and quiet. Shocking twist at the end. Well written.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for taking the time to give feed back, its appreciated, and thanks for the kind comments. Mike

  4. Claire Fuller

    That was an unexpected last line!

  5. Sandra

    I think I can safely say there will be few stories along this line this week. What a surprise that was!

  6. gravadee

    Heartbreaking last line.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Landmines are heartbreaking, thank you for taking the time to comment it is appreciated

  7. Snow's Fissures and Fractures

    What a shocker! Imagine that, trying to find a peace of mind just to end up like that.

  8. Clare Hempstead

    You lulled us into a false sense of security and then BOOM! Well done.

  9. Lynn Love

    That was a shocker. Poor woman, daydreaming and then her life is changed forever. Well written tale, Michael

  10. aliciajamtaas

    It’s interesting where a writer’s mind takes them. I can’t say I “like” where it took yours, but it made for a powerful piece.

  11. ceayr

    Ouch

  12. Michael Wynn

    Truly shocking and effective last line, well done

  13. Lizy

    Ye gods – that was a shocker of a last line!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Landmines are shockingly indiscriminate things.

  14. Rian Durant

    Uh, that was unexpected and painful…

    1. Michael Humphris

      I love beach walking, each day there are people and children maimed and killed by these indiscriminate mines. Dreadful

    2. Michael Humphris

      Thank you for taking the time to comment, it is appreciated, landmines are dreadful indiscriminate things.

  15. Dale

    That was an unexpected twist!
    Boom is right!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Dale, Landmines are dreadful things

  16. helenmidgley

    That was surprise ending alright 😉

    1. Michael Humphris

      Hi Helen, good to hear from you, sadly landmines are dreadful things.

  17. Symanntha Renn

    I really enjoy seeing the different places people go with the picture. I also enjoy it when the story makes a point. Good job!

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you so much Symanntha,

  18. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    A sad reminder… a topic for her next book should be easy though.

    1. Michael Humphris

      If she survives she will become a great author .

  19. plaridel

    the ending was a complete surprise. nicely done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      It surprised me too.

  20. gahlearner

    Unexpected, shocking and very powerful. Great writing, Michael.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I was pleased with the simplicity of this story, but i was even more pleased to get your view on Flotsam 1948

  21. ansumani

    The end was unexpected. It’s amazing how a picture of random stuff takes you to abandoned land mines. Nicely done.

    1. Michael Humphris

      The end surprised me to. Mike

  22. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    I felt her stress but was then surprised where this went.

    1. Michael Humphris

      I was also surprised, I do appreciate your comments, Mike

  23. Inside the Mind of Isadora

    I was in a dreamy beach state of mind and then you gave us that power line at the end, Michael.
    Super write …
    Isadora

    1. Michael Humphris

      Sorry Isadora, .

  24. Emily Livingstone

    An interesting journey in this story! Poor Judy, lost in the midst of her moment of stress. A good reminder for us in the note you added about mines.

    1. Michael Humphris

      Thank you Emily. Sadly the ability to roam safely is decreasing.

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